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|Subject: Re: Bard'ika Tales Wed Jul 15, 2009 2:52 pm|| |
Thanks so much for taking the time to write your feelings on this, you have no idea how this helps me improve. I used to think that I could just go on and on in my text editor and pay no mind to feedback but I was wrong. It turns out that I rely very much on what the reader thinks, to a fault sometimes, and this time it was hard to keep a cool head about what happens in the story.
You can say I wasn't my chipper cheerful self when writing this chapter and the repercussions on the characters are dire. It's a shame, really. If I could rewind and rewrite some parts I would, but what's done is done! The next part will have to make up for the current failings with better characterizations, funnier dialogues and more star-warsy descriptions. In all honesty I miss Aresu and the clones so I might head back to their POVs
But it's in general a dark story... turning "good guys" into "bad guys" is not as easy as I'd expected, with everything implied.